tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post3821300571857054555..comments2023-11-05T17:00:29.086+09:00Comments on The Misplaced Man in Japan: CornucopiaNYDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17182735945473879595noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-9460710944243654092008-07-19T04:31:00.000+09:002008-07-19T04:31:00.000+09:00Nicely, nicely done! My favorite lines? The last f...Nicely, nicely done! My favorite lines? The last four.moihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07824043795171732429noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-64909561617672108122008-07-19T01:18:00.000+09:002008-07-19T01:18:00.000+09:00Very, very cool.Very, very cool.Meganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09387041422819664987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-56376258119401718082008-07-18T09:03:00.000+09:002008-07-18T09:03:00.000+09:00Whoa!! "obsidian in a cup" That is fabulous! I r...Whoa!! <BR/> "obsidian in a cup" <BR/><BR/>That is fabulous! I read yore poem to Uncle. He say, "That fella has a very creative mind."Aunty Bellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13868780211706866610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-28751963623074620672008-07-18T02:21:00.000+09:002008-07-18T02:21:00.000+09:00Impressive. And you used 21 words I've never used...Impressive. And you used 21 words I've never used in my life. I think that's a new record!Ed & Jeannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00730956006290504616noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-65090711968971944132008-07-17T23:40:00.000+09:002008-07-17T23:40:00.000+09:00Thank you, thank you all. I will be posting my nex...Thank you, thank you all. I will be posting my next masterpiece: Ode to a three legged pinapple next Monday.<BR/><BR/>Hope you all attend the reading.<BR/>Free wine and Brie cheese will be discussed.NYDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17182735945473879595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-4045637987006779572008-07-17T22:31:00.000+09:002008-07-17T22:31:00.000+09:00Damn. These were SO cool, I am left with nothing b...Damn. These were SO cool, I am left with nothing but praise, along with regret that I couldn't find my black beret to put on prior to reading it.puerileuwaitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16721399673017380093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-42818067670672862262008-07-17T12:07:00.000+09:002008-07-17T12:07:00.000+09:00Did you ever listen to Def Leppards "billy...Did you ever listen to Def Leppards "billy's got a gun" sober- but then heard it later when you were buzzed? And couldn't believe the difference? The song has 2 versions- but only depending on YOUR state of mind. (0r MY state of mind, as the case may be)<BR/><BR/>Your poem is the same. Buzzed I understand a "pie crust pavement"...but who knows what I'll comprehend in the morning?<BR/><BR/>Nite friend- whatever time it is in your part of the world :)<BR/><BR/>-Cora <3Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-73742862370736764922008-07-17T11:16:00.000+09:002008-07-17T11:16:00.000+09:00LOVE your poetry! It's seriously wonderful.LOVE your poetry! It's seriously wonderful.Serenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00798532682456165053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-47773741459735079832008-07-17T10:20:00.000+09:002008-07-17T10:20:00.000+09:00Such wonderful and vivid imagery. I love your use...Such wonderful and vivid imagery. I love your use of alliteration too.whimsical brainpanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13158339502955458999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-63408048709829494252008-07-17T07:28:00.000+09:002008-07-17T07:28:00.000+09:00Fab! Reaaaaally really fab!xxpinksFab! Reaaaaally really fab!<BR/>xx<BR/>pinksPinkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14002817889549140522noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-50821775785222241562008-07-17T07:11:00.000+09:002008-07-17T07:11:00.000+09:00I am sorry, did you say anything after dungeon? *g...I am sorry, did you say anything after dungeon? *grins*C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/01605972471819914591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-14846877149016850962008-07-17T07:05:00.000+09:002008-07-17T07:05:00.000+09:00JGrrrl~ You are most welcome. Hope it didn't distu...JGrrrl~ You are most welcome. Hope it didn't disturb your tummy.<BR/><BR/>Alan~ Ika Sumi is Squid ink in japanese. Pasta dishes made from it are quite popular here.<BR/><BR/>Mona~ You are far too gracious. Thank you.NYDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17182735945473879595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-61266811530155043932008-07-17T02:49:00.000+09:002008-07-17T02:49:00.000+09:00Cornucopia indeed! That is a lot of goodies dug ou...Cornucopia indeed! That is a lot of goodies dug out from in there :D<BR/><BR/>I LOVE this! This is such stark and vivid imagery, with literary devices in just right measure at right places. The onomatopoeia is perfect! & the use of alliteration is the masterstroke here!<BR/><BR/>First it reminded me of Eliot's "Love song of Alfred J Prufrock" specially the donut shop!<BR/><BR/>I love the line "clutching paper parcels with parenthetical perplexity" . That is such a wonderful Visual Imagery!<BR/><BR/>"Syrupy students slide slothy and slow-like into class.<BR/>Settling their softsides on swiveling supporters." : Onomatopoeia at its best, I've ever seen !!<BR/><BR/>The next lines too : The ruffle riffle raffle....molasses ,mahogany work mode" . Excellent!<BR/><BR/>Misplaced, each word & line here is perfectly placed! The salt & pepper grey winter "sprinkled with confectioner snowflakes" ...Your cornucopia has all flavors I see! LOL!<BR/><BR/>I love the way you describe the changing colors of time ( sun) turning day into Life... Also representing colors of Life... how daytime activity forms what is called Life. <BR/><BR/>& Then the juxtaposition with Darkness & Night Life! " crystal colored cocktails" .. " silvery steely cylinders with swizzle stick style" .... The use of words here is nothing if not graceful!<BR/><BR/>Your descriptions of the creatures of the night ...I'm speechless & I read it again & again slowly taking in each imagery as a sensuous enjoyment! The description of the street walker is summed up so succinctly , Its amazing!<BR/><BR/>Such economy of words, such powerful imagery! After a long time I am delighted to encounter a work of Art of such quality!!<BR/><BR/>I love the summing up too :) I love the way you describe the electric bulb as Thomas Edison :)& also the description of coffee or tea cup in the rusty morning section! & the buttery golden sun smiling through soot stained windows reminds me of toast taken out from the toaster, toasted to a golden brown & then buttered...<BR/><BR/>Hey.. This made me hungry!<BR/><BR/>Even the imminent "fade out" at the end fits in :D even if it is accidental! :DMonahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08615034229525061880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-46198517966257575882008-07-17T01:15:00.000+09:002008-07-17T01:15:00.000+09:00Alright! I adore alliteration! (What is ika sumi?)...Alright! I adore alliteration! <BR/>(What is ika sumi?)Allanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00419026498128315319noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-21698605.post-54375608252009058242008-07-17T00:48:00.000+09:002008-07-17T00:48:00.000+09:00I really enjoyed that - thank you!I really enjoyed that - thank you!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com